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Hi people,
I finally decided to come up with a new form. The form has been named Alliterisen (by Lencio, a friend of mine) after alliteration and my real name Udit (The Risen). Here's the first poem written using The Alliterisen.
TIME'S TRAVELERS
Wonderful waves and glorious graves,
Liberal learning and barbaric burning.
Futile friends and edited ends,
Mighty mountains and fantastic fountains.
Soundless screams and dying dreams,
Revolting rivers and good givers,
Have all existed since time was born.
Safe senses and deadly defences,
Hidden horrors, and exhausted explorers.
Creative cries, and endless eyes,
Scorching summers and decaying drummers.
Soft signs and lamenting lines,
Pretending priests and bothering beasts,
Will always live till the end of time.
Now The Alliterisen requires a lot of effort.
There should be seven lines.
The syllables should be as follows-
1st line- x syllables
2nd line- x+2 syllables
3rd line- x-1 syllables
4th line- (x+2)-1 syllables
5th line- x-2 syllables
6th line- (x+2)-2 syllables
7th line- x syllables
THERE ARE MORE THAN ONE WAYS TO WRITE IN THIS FORM.
RHYMING IS OPTIONAL
But each line must have 2 alliterations.
WHAT IS AN ALLITERATION?
Alliteration is the repetition of the initial consonant. There should be at least two repetitions in a row.
For Example-
In "Wonderful waves and glorious graves"
"W" in wonderful and waves- First alliteration
"G" in glorious and graves- Second alliteration
You may create as many verses as you want, but they must follow the same form.
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THE ALLITERISEN CONTEST- allpoetry.com/Contest/1818815
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OTHER EXAMPLES-
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MOST IMPORTANT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
PS- If you are using this form to write a poem, please be sure to include that I have made this form. Thanks.
EXAMPLES!!!!!~
DIFFERENT SYLLABLE SEQUENCES THAT CAN BE USED TO WRITE AN ALLITERISEN.
THERE ARE INFINITE SEQUENCES, I HAVE LISTED SOME EASY ONES.
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1st line- 8 syllables
2nd line- 10 syllables
3rd line- 7 syllables
4th line- 9 syllables
5th line- 6 syllables
6th line- 8 syllables
7th line- 8 syllables (same as first)
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1st line- 9 syllables
2nd line- 11 syllables
3rd line- 8 syllables
4th line- 10 syllables
5th line- 7 syllables
6th line- 9 syllables
7th line- 9 syllables (same as first)
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1st line- 10 syllables
2nd line- 12 syllables
3rd line- 9 syllables
4th line- 11 syllables
5th line- 8 syllables
6th line- 10 syllables
7th line- 10 syllables (same as first)
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1st line- 11 syllables
2nd line- 13 syllables
3rd line- 10 syllables
4th line- 12 syllables
5th line- 9 syllables
6th line- 11 syllables
7th line- 11 syllables (same as first)
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1st line- 12 syllables
2nd line- 14 syllables
3rd line- 11 syllables
4th line- 13 syllables
5th line- 10 syllables
6th line- 12 syllables
7th line- 12 syllables (same as first)
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1st line- 13 syllables
2nd line- 15 syllables
3rd line- 12 syllables
4th line- 14 syllables
5th line- 11 syllables
6th line- 13 syllables
7th line- 13 syllables (same as first)
THE ALLITERISEN CONTEST-
allpoetry.com/Contest/1818815
Hi people,
I finally decided to come up with a new form. The form has been named The Risen after my actual name, Udit. Here's the first poem written using The
I finally decided to come up with a new form. The form has been named The Risen after my actual name, Udit. Here's the first poem written using The
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Wow. This sounds much more complex than it looks. I like it. I ought to try and create my own form one day. I've had a few ideas, but have never taken them to the next level.
Neat form. The name sounds nice too. -
This is a really cool form and gives you some leeway as far as what you start with, but I'm confused with the meaning of alliterisan. I'm probably just thinking about it too hard, but do you think you could explain it a little better, maybe show me an example. I would appreciate it, thnx1! ~Takayuki~
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*Scratches her head* Oooh...it's a tough form, especially for the poor, exhausted brains of mine. Boards sucked out all their energy.
But nevermind, I'll study it for some days and then, try it.
By the way, congrats on the inclusion of the Alliterisen in Shadow Poetry!
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What this poem requires is the specified syllable sequence. You may use any of the example sequences I have listed. Also, there must be two pairs of alliterations in every line.
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I wrote one but its totally weird, because I thought the 2nd, 4th and 6th lines had to be the same words each time, only varying a little in number of syllables. If you want to read my messed up poem it is called Prescious Perceptions.
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i have entered for it
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I have started a contest for it-
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this is a really cool new way of writing poems and im going to try it right now!!
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Hi, I shall try this in a set meter or of 8 or 10, it will be a good diciplin, nice idea my friend, hugs Di
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The mathematics of the syllable system is incorrect.
If X number is the first line, then 2X would be the initial number times two. The way you have it set up, you're just adding the number two.
This seems to occur in the fourth and sixth lines. For example:
1st line: 8 (x) syllables
2nd line: 10 (x+2) syllables
3rd line: 7 (x-1 syllables
4th line: 9 (2x-1) syllables
5th line: 6 (x-2) syllables
6th line: 8 (2x-2) syllables
7th line: 8 (x) syllables
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Thank you for the invitations. I'll study the form and see if I can come up with something.
Avril
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Thanx so much for the invite to your contest! I might be able to come up with something, but right now my brain is kinda stuck. I love alliteration though! Nice idea for a form.
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I'll hold you to it.
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crazy, thanks for the invite. I'll try and tinker something up for sure!
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Thanks. Waiting for your entry.
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Yes I did read this and will have a go.Have bookmarked to make sure I rember all the rules so as not to make a fool out of myself!Thank you for reminding me.Elizabeth.Am at work now so thinking cap will go on tonight.
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Lots of people have already written using this form.
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Interesting
Nice one! Not sure it would fit one of my daft dittys!
Let me know if anyone follows through with this... -
I think that it is really creative that you would think of a new form of poetry, great job!
I hope it goes well and catches on.
also, thanks for your comment on my friends poem 'teach me', i'm sorry its taken me this long to get back
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nice but rhythem and scheme deprived of sense can never be an ideal poetry
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Yes, the last line is free, but must have the same number of syllables as there are in the last line. If you aren't good at counting syllables-
www.bryceland.com/haiku.php
And you can pick one of the example syllable sequences listed above. -
Genious
I think I might attempt this after I have mastered Erin Thomas' trisect... have you heard of it? -
Different. I like it a lot. I'll give it a try sometime in the near future.
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dit this is great. Good luck with your form. Maybe I will try my hands on writing one sometime soon
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Udit, this is great... good luck with this form...
I'm still try to grasp it... in your poem "TIME'S TRAVELERS" in the seventh lines, I can't see any alliteration... am I correct? Is it how it should be in this form? Though I'm terrible when it come to syllable counts.... in the first and the second line of your poem... I make out 9-11 syllables...though it needs checking ... I haven't checked the rest...
Won der ful waves and glor i ous graves, 9
Lib e ral learn ing and bar bar ic burn ing. 11
I would love to attempt this form, but at the moment my muse is not cooperating...but I'll try my best...
mina
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I like this form it is very creative keep it up. you should so read my poem Called "Never Again"
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awesome
I like how this form was made, i like how it flows, i like i like i like!!!! Great job thanks for sharing your form. Very creative. -
Interesting form. Great job for comeing up with it. I think I may have to give it a shot if my muse sticks around long enough.
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wow...that is really amazing!! I tryed writing a sonnet which was hard...but this...a person writing this is very skilled. I love the examples I read for this new form of poetry. I loved how they just rolled off my tough and painted pictures in my head. Great job with making this new form...i see you took a lot of care, pride, effort and time to creat something like this. Great job and looking forward to another new form.
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It's an interestimg idea... I think I shall give it a shot.. thanks for sharing
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Going to study this exctiting new form,have a go and enter the Contest.Brilliant idea.So am wishing myself luck.Elizabeth
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Here's the link to the alliterisen contest-
allpoetry.com/Contest/1818815
Please give it a try. -
Please do give it a try. Here's the link to the contest.
allpoetry.com/Contest/1818815
I have also listed some possible syllable sequences, in the column.
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I'll hold you to that.
Waiting for your entry here- allpoetry.com/Contest/1818815
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It doesn't require algebra at all. It's just for idiots who can't understand that stuff.
The main theme is that-
When you arrange the odd number lines- they appear in decreasing order, and when you arrange even number lines, they appear in decreasing order. The example is listed above. -
I love trying new forms of writing I cant wait to try this one!
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This is an interesting form, and I admire your initiative to create it. I do like alliteration in poems. But, to me, the syllabic structure seems a little over-complicated, considering one would have to do algebra to write a poem. It's a much different feel from, say, a Shakespearean sonnet with ten syllables per line. Obviously, a form that challenges poets in any way is always a good step forward, but it just feels like someone would always have to have the 'key' to the form to be able to write in it. I also agreed with another comment which said that it seems to be a form in which almost the entire poem is just an alliterative list... but that was just the example you gave, and I will be attempting this form, so maybe I'll find that it doesn't necessarily have to be written that way. Overall, this seems to be at least a well-thought-out form, and many people seem to like it a lot.
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What a creative poem form. I may try it sometime soon.
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Hm... sounds very nice.
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Sounds quite fascinating... I have some time now, though I'm tired to try it out.
Maab
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I'm going to keep an eye on this form. It seems to me that through it's structure it's going to be basically a list-based form, and that's honestly not my favorite, but then again I'm a free form writer.... perhaps others can see what to do with it where I cannot.
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For that, I need friends and poets like you to use this form. I have started a contest too. I request you to please give it a try.
allpoetry.com/Contest/1818815
I will be grateful.
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what a creative piece of writing...i am quite impressed by your skill udit. lovely work and your imagary in this piece is just outstanding. well done...i like the way you have named the form after you
i hope it becomes popular and you become famous
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where can i enter the contest???
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Work those Syllables.
This is a very intense Poem and the imagery is full of mystical and fabulous contradictions which make sense in a world gone mad and yet has been like this from the beginning.The form is interesting and this is going to be quite a challenge for the brave hearted,super idea and hope you receive a lot of entries.Elizabeth. -
Any progress?
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How's the muse going?
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There were some corrections in that poem. Please rectify them. Thanks for entering.
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interesting form... good thinking!
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Your poem is very good, very interesting... you've created a challenging but rewarding form I may give it a try, I'll for sure bookmark it so I can refer back to it :0
Dee
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Thank you.
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aww since you asked me so nicely to try it i will but its gonna take some time and on top of that, Ill feature the form and the poem
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Thanks for the invite its interesting. I like the way the lines rhyme as well
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I will applaud you but i dont think i can do it sorry but really a great idea!!!!!!!
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This is not alliteration. It's a whole new form I created- alliterisen. Please try one when u have time.
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Wow... a very well thought out poetry form... I may try this although I'm not big of form poetry... this is definately creative and well explained. Thanks for sending me the link to this.
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It is always pleasant to see someone using or promoting alliteration. Thanks i will check it back later.
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See how many people are proud of you. We all are. All the best here and in your life. The contest is doing well so far. You have a couple of entries in one day!!! thats good!
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Standing as I applaud!!!!!
Udit, This is fantastic my dear son. I am so proud of you for this new form you have come up with and you should talk with your uncle Jim about getting it syndicated at shadowpoetry.com as it is yours. You never cease to amaze me and you always put a smile on my face with your words so great.
I will have to copy the instructions for this and give it a go for your contest. I can see this won't be an easy form. Time to get the muse going and see what I can come up with. You are a true poet and I am so proud to call you my son. The Risen Sun has shined on sunny day and brought warmth and happiness to her heart along with a smile so grand to her face. Kudos to you son for this wonderful new form and keep the ink flowing.
Lots of love, Mom xoxoxoxo
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crystaldust 13-02-06 17:09
It sounds a great idea and looks as it could be fun as well as difficult to do. However, as a person who took the school record for Arithmetic - 2 out of 200 in the most important exam - I shall probably pass on this one. If I live long enough, I'll have a real go at it. I hope you get lots of entries and have a ball reading and judging them. Cheers! Joy -
A very cool form! My only concern is that people might get too focussed on the alliteration and forget all about the meaning of the poem! Definitely a challenge. I will try this one. Let's see what I can come up with!
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Well, what do I say? I have got a lot of positive feedback for this, so I don't really know what to say. Anways, this was just the first poem for the form I have created. I hope to come up with a lot more wonderful stuff.
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It is always pleasant to see someone using or promoting alliteration, which was the basic principle of English poetry until William the Bastard ruined things.
Some day I hope to run a competition based on Old English alliterative metre (though it will be difficult on this site, as the layout will not accept the mid-line space... I know; I have tried!)
Good luck with your form....
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hey, y have u made this a column?? well, this is a new form of poetry, and you've even put a kindf poem here.. so, u can call it a poem, instd of a column
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okay, yes damn me, it is an alternate syllable pattern, I get it. This is now going to be a challenge for me, but dont expect anything so soon lol!!!
It is is very wonderful AND challenging form.
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wow!! i just love this form... and it is true that this needs lot of effort, and i guess it must have used lot of brains to make !!! great job, and i think applause deserving
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I like Lencio's suggestion for a name for this form, alliterisen. It combines the main thing about the style with your name. I love your new form, and your example poem, but this is very tough. I will have to see a few examples before I dare wrap my brain around it... You have my applause, Udit, and I give you my standing ovation! BRAVO! Jim
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For the syllable count-
Take a number, say 10. That's the first line.
Add 2 to it. 12. That's the second line.
Now, since you started with 10, the next line will have 9 syllables, one less than the first line.
The fourth line will have 2 more than 9- 11 syllables.
So have a look at the sequence now-
First line- 10
Second line- 12
Third Line- 9
Fourth Line- 11
Fifth Line- 8
Sixth Line- 10
Line 1, 3, and 5 go like- 10, 9, 8
Line 2, 3, and four are- 12, 11, 10.
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I love the idea of the 2 sets of alliteration in this form, but not quite sure of the unusual syllable count and pattern, but anyway I am open to all new forms created by modern day poets, and this is your style, was only curious to know about it. And isn't one required to have alliterations in the last lines? Since this has mostly to do with alliterations, why dont you merge your name and call it an "alliterisen"? Would sound cool lol!!! I will definitely try this form, I feel there is a lot of challenge in this. It is going to take half of my mind to get one though. but it would be worth the try. Have a great day and bravo!!!
Lencio
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