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Avar valley• Show poetry

I fly

I crash

I swim

I sink

Heart beats

Mind thinks

Just one of LIFE's chainlinks





"How much more shall we scream inside, before the outside is made ugly"














I do have a myspace account. I also can be contacted through myspace im. But that's about it.
http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=user.viewprofile&friendid=31159910

  • Last seen on Jul 24 2:21 PM 2008. Member since April 18, 2003.
  • I'm a obsidian idea poet for 587 comments.
  • My mood is , and quote is "Love like Jesus loved".
  • I am a 21 year old girl (United States)
  • When I'm not writing, I'm an artist, Praise and worship leader. A nanny, an acting teacher, A big sister to hundreds of kids..
  • I am in the groups A How to Give Constructive Criticism Group, Place of Prayer
  • I have 587 comments

My Poetry

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  • Deliverence
    of ribs and ruins and ridiculed roses
    Cultivating, Begging for something like moses
    55 lines, 3 comments, December 22, 2007. In Spiritual, Thoughts, Personal, Pain
  • Everyday, I Die
    Process this prism and interpret the colorful endings
    Vibrant in their silent shadows
    83 lines, 7 comments, December 12, 2006. In Spiritual
  • Jubilee
    Suttle shades of sea-breeze, green
    Swaying in the new moonlight
    25 lines, 3 comments, November 30, 2006
  • Admist The Dark, I Sing
    Hephzibah you call
    As I dance at your feet
    42 lines, 2 comments, November 30, 2006

Guest Book

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  • Unspecified on June 2, 2006
    Hey you. Long time no talk. How've you been?
  • wbiro on May 9, 2006
    Yes, now I see your God/Satan theme in the piece... (but aren't relationships like that?!) As for my guy/girl perception- that stems from my coming across so much of it here each day! So a refreshing theme you have here... and choosing good over evil- that is also rare...
  • wbiro on May 8, 2006
    Hello, ktg, I just noticed your request in the Constructive Criticism Application area! So I'll give your piece a critique... here it is for reference:

    In the corner, the iniquity hisses vile inexactitudes
    and beckons me to join the side show carnival of beautiful dilapidation.

    This time, though, I turn down the clown who smiles deceit
    and choose to walk the path that opposes his direction.

    Everything is going to be all right this time because I believe the beauty exists in its unbent form in another place and time.

    I have found the stars that trace the pictures of the factualism that he once led me to believe was nonexistent.

    The notes ring clear now,like diamonds,
    in the fading blue of the sky's song,
    Playing me the answers to every riddle
    that once was plagued with such taunting questioning.

    Finally, now I am overwhelmed with an iridescent cure that shall never leak the grey of the eighty-sixed who now sits, burning ireful scarlet, scarring in his corner as he soaks in his own defeat.

    What could this be but God's plan to lead me, dark blue and crumbled,
    to the land of the living where I can once again blush periwinkle, sparkle and be pieced back together by the angels of Heaven.

    Glorious is this frosting candle,
    still flaming on the ice like the perfect contradiction,
    where the falsity prophecy's the authentic,
    So that in the end the lie never existed in the first place.

    The truth was just misinterpreted from the beginning


    OK, the first line doesn't have any emotion, and has large words, so it sounds like a guy writing it, and one who just lost the female portion of his audience! Now I just discovered you are a female, and that it is an important part of the poem, I just realized. (I didn't expect to have an insight during this critique!) The poet's gender issue throws a whole new light on the subject matter... in my case, it opened up my 'acceptance' to it somehow (don't quite know, it's a psychological matter beyond me!) and has reshaped my reaction to it... don't ask me how or why there either, I'm just observing myself from without... OK, now to read and see if I can generate any constructives... well, the first stanza is quite humorous in a tragic way, when one really reads it! lol sorry... OK, it's something about beauty and a bad relationship... then suicide (for him)... then the last lines go even deeper into truth/perception... I almost hear screaming then calm... OK, mechanics- I would play with the form to experiment with the visual aspects, it looked a bit disorganized in the IM box... in playing with the form I often end up unintendedly editing feelings and imagery, too... I see there is no title to your piece, I would have a lot of fun with that... let's see... 'Beauty and Lies' 'Beauty Lies Suicide and Victory' 'Beauty- The Sideshow' 'Beauty and Clowns' 'The Nightmare Within this Beauty' you see how the gender of the author is important- as a female the author is walking within the beauty, a male would be observing it from without... I hope this helps, or at least is a bit stimulating!
  • the blinding Son on December 30, 2005
    yeah i have aim. ill give you mine.. and my bands aim. mine is Viudanegra88... and my bands aim is VulgarTryst im on both... but mostly im on myspace. do you have a myspace??

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