i am 20 years old. my poetry is mainly love poetry. i do write other stuff that i choose not to share for now. i have a theory that the world is a dark place and that type of writing would only darken it. so i try to brighten peoples point of views. i am engaged to a beautiful woman named kristen a.k.a. Speak87 as some of you might know her. she is in AP. she is also a great writer, and artist. she is the love of my life and i knew it from the moment i met her. but anywho i am knew to this site as of like a week ago. i am looking forward to getting your thoughts on some of my writing. well good day to you all and may your thoughts be guided by apollo.
- Last seen on Sep 2 12:09 PM 2006. Member since July 29, 2006.
- I'm a emerald dog poet for 7 comments.
- My mood is , and quote is "a woman is the sweetest nectar of them all".
- I am a 20 year old guy (United States)
- When I'm not writing, I'm a fork lift operator.
- I have 7 comments, 10 poems
My Poetry
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you wanna get horny and your a girl go ahead and read on. i am taken i want to say this right now.131 lines, 4 comments, July 29, 2006. In Erotica
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you need to cherish in order to appreciate and thats something noone can take away from you34 lines, July 29, 2006. In Love
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this was a lost love but no worries i learned to live without it. and i have found a much greater one that i know i cant live with out that is my fiancee kriste28 lines, 1 comment, July 29, 2006. In Love
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what can i say some people determine by the first kiss if it will work in a relationship. a kiss can tell alot27 lines, 3 comments, July 29, 2006. In Love
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AbortMe on August 2, 2006If you'd like I have some erotica you could take a look at. Skin Voices is a good example. And Advanced Chemistry is great example of how to use sexual metaphor. "Sex without really saying it".
Feel free to be blatantly honest about what you think, too. I'm sure you're itching for a way to lash out at me for my brutal honesty with your work. -
AbortMe on August 2, 2006It wouldn't matter who said it to me. I didn't find it to be good writing, period. If you'd like suggestions I suggest that you read over my previous comment again. As for your comment about spelling errors, how do you explain the errors in your other works? While it may be difficult to spell properly in the "heat of passion" I imagine you can still find the spell check. I looked at some of your other works, but felt it would be a waste of time to comment since they would generally say the same thing: Use the passion you have to bring your poetry to a new level. You could be more figurative.. try to allude to your "passions" instead of blurting it straight out. You don't get as much sentiment across with blurting and it makes it sound cheap. Just because you've been told your poetry is good doesn't mean you can't try to make it better. Keep writing, good luck, and use the spell check.
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sweetdreams15 on July 29, 2006You write great poetry.
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Speak87 on July 29, 2006you dont have to promise, i already know you will
