What I write can be largely separated into:
Rhyming "Love" lyrics
Rhyming Poetry
Non Rhyming Poetry
Short Stories/long narrative poems
I've now realised that I haven't been putting enough effort into polishing my poetry. So most of my time is now spent revising or deleting pieces.
Rhyming "Love" lyrics
Rhyming Poetry
Non Rhyming Poetry
Short Stories/long narrative poems
I've now realised that I haven't been putting enough effort into polishing my poetry. So most of my time is now spent revising or deleting pieces.
- Last seen on Oct 17 6:32 AM 2007. Member since July 2, 2005.
- I'm a onyx dragon poet for 689 comments.
- I am a 20 year old guy
- When I'm not writing, I'm a Student.
- I am in the groups A How to Give Constructive Criticism Group, a poetry critique
- I have 689 comments
My Stories
-
Let me tell you the story of the kid with a box on his head. A square cardboard box, with little holes, not big enough for seeing, but enough for breathing. It had one distinct
-
I'm walking up a pristine strip of silver grass, that decorates the gold paven streets. Straight line of 1000 year old trees, shelter me from the excessive sunlight. Too much s
-
Heavy thudding droplets, fall to ground, piercing holes in the concrete.
One after another, followed with haste, reckless abandon. Like it rained for the first time. Almost
Visitor Book
1 - 4 of 11
Show all
-
I recently read a comment you made about LilMrsAttitude's poem "You Left Me Broken Hearted" back in December. Curiously, how do you know that she wasnt' seriously heart-broken at some point in time? Or that she was just writing in that contest to win some points?
With all due respect you've written 37 contest poems and only won 1 gold and 2 silver trophies in addition to a lot of "not-good-enough-for-1st-or-2nd-place" trophies.
This person has only entered 8 or so contests with 2 gold, 1 silver, and 1 bronze... which tells me that she must be doing something right... someone out there likes her poetry.
So, just as a suggestion, maybe try a little constructive critism, or try reading some of her other poems, Such as "Lost" or "Why, Momma." She does write about things she's experienced!
Sincerely,
The-Best (who's here to critique....) -
Hey hey. Thanks so much for taking the time to give a criticism on my poem
hmm yeh, I've gathered from the comments so far that I need a lot more detail! hehe. Again, thanks- I'll keep it all in mind for my next one 
-
Saint-Laurent on September 27, 2005No problem, everyone critiques to theire own taste, and I think mine is very broad. I appreciate people putting effort into their comments. I told him later, I expect him to critically look at my critique, which he did. To my shock and horror he doesn't agree with everything I said. Gasp!
-
abernaith on September 26, 2005Hello. Just dropping by. I failed to thank you properly for the applause you gave me for Deindritch's poem, "A heros redemption". It was a pleasant surprise, to say the least. I went by his poem today and read your lengthy comment. I found it educative, if a bit preferential to your own tastes. I hope Deindritch learns from it. Again, thanks for the applause.
