Coated against the cold, the figure
huddled in the snow, having dreams of
sugar coated donuts, fried chicken and
hamburgers. She woke shivering in the
cold snow as her lust for cocaine began
to torment her. She licked her lips
bloodstained, cracked from the cold.
Memories of a past life flashed in
her foggy mind. Dancing in the ballroom
in a crisp crinoline dress, flowers were
everywhere. She remembered the smell of
the gardenias, magnolias and hydrangeas
as she lost track of where she was.
Her dripping nose, painful to the touch,
shattered the pleasant dream she was in.
A broken, lost shattered creature now
huddled in her cardboard box trying to
stay warm.
Her mind fluttered to the jazz clubs where
she would dance. She was young and beautiful
without a care in the world. She peered at her
past with tinted glasses where everything was
green. She forgot about the bad times, the
rape, unwanted pregnancy, the abusive boyfriend,
all those things that led to the life she had now.
She was far too gone for band-aid fixes by the
do-gooders on the street. Her life was a movie
that was out of frame and tears were the soundtrack.
Author notes
Written August 5th, 2006
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A contest entry
- Level One: Difficulty: Painless by IndividualEleven.
600 points, ended January 29, 2007, 182 entries
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Aww this was so deeply emotional & heartfelt.
Beautifully expressed your feelings & thoughts.
Lovely write!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Merry meet,
Thank you for commenting on my work.
Amythest
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Merry meet Jinxgirl,
Thank you for your applause and your kind comment. This is just an amalgem of people that I have come across in my life. Sorry, I just noticed that I won. Thank you for your congratulations. I am sooo suprised
I didn't think I had a chance. Thank you again.
Amythest
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wow... this is the most beautiful poem about drug addiction I have ever read. You definitely deserved to win this. I was very impressed with how effortless you made it seem to use those words, I did the same choice myself and it wasn't easy. Very very impressive.
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This is so very good..I had to think for a while about that comment you left..then i realised i asked that everyone put what option number they had choosen in their authors comments so i could judge but thats alright so please do keep the words you used in comments so i can judge easier..ok now the poem. After i read this i just sat thinking woah that was deep and indeed this poem is. It's so different it shows how tough life can be and how others feel when life hits a low. This made me realise the horrors of being homeless. I loved this poem. The imagery and idea of the poem was deep. It moved me. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Merry meet crimson hostility,
Thank you for your kind words regarding my poem.
Amythest -
Merry meet crystal,
Thank you again for your wonderful words about my poem. I hope that you will stand by your friend and help her get her life back. No one asks to be raped, regardless of their sex. Thank you for the applause as well.
Amythest -
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I was really moved by this poem. It is so sad and depressing and yet so true how some people end up. I have a friend who was recently raped and is having a tough time about it (people treating her like crap) so the last stanza I liked the best especially when you wrote "her life was like a movie that was out of frame and tears were the soundtrack" If this were my contest, I'd defintitely be giving you a gold trophy. This poem is just so amazing, but when is your work anything less?
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The passion in this poem was breathtaking. Your imagery is excellent. You have talent. Amazing talent.
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