Blood spilled onto the pavement,
a dark red rose of pain from the knife.
The thorn of greed from a being full of sin,
that a life has no meaning
when one only worships money.
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Written July 8th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Vampire, blood, romance... Prewrites allowed! by blood tourniquet.
450 points, ended March 18, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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very dark and powerfull!
The message is very good. More people should think like you.
Thank you so much for entering and good luck!
Blessed Be -
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Merry meet tourniquet,
Thank you for your thoughtful comments on my poem.
Amythest
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I like how you got so much darkness and so much beauty across to the readers is such a short piece.
"life has no meaning / when one only worships money" - I have to agree with you here.
DancingRed.
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merry meet Amythest MoonJade... your poem spoke ture to me... and your words.. even though they are short....were flowing like music in my ear.... very true indeed.... best wishes on your poem...
~Blessed be~ -
Merry meet Radio sirens4 Death,
Thank you for the applause and for your kind comments. Poems don't always need be long to get the um, point
across. Thank you again.
Amythest -
haha very short but true to the bones,such greed in this world has left it to killing, great job at expressing that
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you met the requirements!!
Good LUCK!!
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