My daughter, you've come of age.
This I give to you,
as it was given to me,
in honor of the brave women
who came across the waves.
This is our history
She came with nothing,
just the clothes on her back.
This was hidden, kept safe,
in the hem of the only dress she had.
This is our legacy from her.
Our history, which has been
passed mother to daughter,
then down to me.
Now, I pass it to you, and
you will to your daughter,
at her coming of age.
Author notes
This is in reference to the daughter getting married-in essence her dowry from a distant ancestor.
Written April 1st, 2006
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A contest entry
- Sensory Perception by Wee Mira.
300 points, ended May 1, 2006, 22 entries
Silver trophy winner
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wonderful absolutly wonderful
thank you for entering
~mira~ -
Merry meet smoking gun,
thank you for your comments.
Amythest -
this is a good rhyming poem ,good word choice, good soft rhythm, all around good job-smoking gun
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Merry meet ea,
thank you for the congrats
Amythest -
congrats!
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very precious sentiment with a fascinating story of that cameo. I do hope it will stay in your family forever and always be remembered how it came to be. Too many times such family legacies get lost after awhile. Thank you for sharing this and best wishes in the contest,
reenie
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Merry meet ea,
thank you for enjoying the poem. Thank you also for the suggestion. I went and looked at my final draft and sure enough you were right. I copied from the wrong copy (I have to write everything out long hand-can't seem to get the hang of composing on the computer. It dosen't seem right.
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Thank you for noticing.
Amythest -
This poem gives me goosebumps. I am fascinated to see what survives in families over generations. Sometimes it's a big piece, like a cradle, but no matter how poor the family may have been, the thing that survives is usually a symbol of hope.
I think that in the third stanza, perhaps you might want to consider changing the word "through" in the 3rd line and then eliminating the word "down" in the 4th.
I enjoyed this piece. Thanks.
~ea
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