Falling, falling deep below
Smiling, to an unknown glow
I reach out for something to hold
I hide but still myself, I show
A mask for me I never find
Disguises, but, I see in my mind
So many faces on every face
Only one is true, besides mine
Alittle unsteady but on my feet
A steadying word I maybe need
But smoke's taken over now
Though I'm firmly in my seat
Strapped in, seated so still
Still falling, rolling down a hill
Swirling, transporting the self
Falling, till I hold my will.
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Written December 18th, 2005
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excellent
marijuana, I love how the lines flow into each other in this poem without sudden end stops, creating that falling feeling in the rhythm itself. Your poems seem to really recreate your subject matter in a very holistic manner. Great poem!
david -
Just a hunch...but, does this poem have anything to do with your user name??? There seems to be something impied here...just trying to be sure. I mean yeah, sure you could actually be hiding from people and having people hide from you. But I think there is somewhat of an eye-opening happening here and your mind is working to come to truths that are not always present. Like I said...just a hunch.
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This is GREAT!
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Thank you for your kind words...
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Lovely
I love this, and the message it gives. It makes me feel like sometimes, we are our true selves, but other times, we're just pleasing who is there. We all have a little of someone or something else in us, and it is ok to be ourselves!
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so many faces on every face, that is so very true. we all wear masks, i suppose they help us get by. peel them away and show the true source
i did a series of photographs on that topic! maybe i will post them in deviant art again and show you the link. -
this is an excellent poem.i love the message it gives out.
i wish you luck in the contest. -
Great
Great poem. You create vivid images. I can see what is happening in the poem. It makes a great social commentary on the way we live our lives. We constantly try to hide, but also be ourselves and hold on to our originality. Great style. -
could you tell me what you commented on?
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I like this alot
the imagery is wonderful
good work!
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You have a strong message within your lines. I always like coming across our new member that can do this. Your rhyme scheme was a nice touch as well.
Keep penning and welcome to AP!
~ John
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