F ugitive efforts, lost is time
R egulations, restrictions,
U niformity imposed by
S tructures of past regimes.
T arnished memories,
R ationalization of deeds,
A ssumptions of innocence,
T angible anger ~justified
I ncorrigible Youth
O nce branded villains
N ow heroes of a Nation!
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Living in a country that was once rife with anger and unrest, I am blessed to now reside in a rainbow nation!
South African Talent
Written November 28th, 2005
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Thanks again for this one my love. Yes we have most certainly shown the world that we can not only survive change, but in fact become stronger and better because of it. I have a huge amount of belief in the future of this country. The secret lies in the youth: They are growing up so strong and positive - it is really exciting.
Moira
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I will see if I can get another one done in time, Yes we have been approached by so many other countries, groups to help then in times of trouble, Our country is truly special and unique, in that while the world were holding there breath waiting for a bloodbath, though a truly South African miracle, we managed to unity and stride forward stronger than ever before! Yes we have our difficulties, but I would not give up Africa and our truly blessed way of life for anything right now!
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Thank you Dins for entering this poem. I think it is true of this country and I know that many others have followed our progress with interest and have asked for help to help them with transition. I think this is a great acrostic. So, how about another entry , huh???
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F ugitive effort, lost is time
because of greed from diamond mines
R egulations, restrictions,
endless polocies and dictates
U niformity imposed by
racist facists who all lie
S tructures of past regimes.
lie wrecked like rusted war machines
T arnished memories,
embeded in our skulls to hemorige
R ationalization of deeds,
as the labs make endless poison seeds
A ssumptions of innocence,
been replaced by the tag terrorist
T angible anger ~justified
yet more and more are bieng fried
I ncorrigible Youth
must buck the slalls and find the answer
O nce branded villains
now all worshiped kings on hilltops
N ow heroes of a Nation!
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Wow. Nice poem. You highlight the frustration. It's quite nice. Acrostic poems are quite good to underly symbolism. Nice work!
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this is really good so true
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i usually do not like acrostics, but I like your wording on this. I like the tangible anger- justified and the last two lines especially. I must say I enjoyed this. -
Gr8t efforts
The way the acrostic message seen in this text is quite thought provoking and good efforts.
FRUSTRATION is such a word, just to utter u feel the pinch of it.
First of all
Rampant social
Understandings
Solutions
Takes us to
Raw n Ruthless Reality
Invoke
Our Immediate observations
Null n Void !
best of luck my dear Dragonsong !
subbu -
great job
This poem will really make you think -
Thank you Yemassee for a valued comment. Our country is amazing and has so much going for it. Yes we have our problems, like all the others, but we have moved through many challenges, and will continue to do so in the future.
~Dragonsong~
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I watched that recent history unfold here in America, and was amazed to see the transition in power without a evolution. It speaks well for all of the people of South Africa. Your Axcrostic is effective in pointing to the history and to the future.
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Hmm, I do not really agree with this poem or the comments made on it. As a poem and an acrostic it is good, but once again, I do not agree with it.
South Africa is not progressing, it is regressing. More and more people are jobless, corruption is running wild. People exposing corruprion are punished.
Public services are in shambles.
Hatred against whites are nurtured and in everything you see whites are pictured as bad and uncultured etc etc.
I'm not trying to say whites are perfect and have always been doing the right thing. Yes they made a lot of mistakes and did a lot of inhuman things, but that does not justify what is going on at the moment.
Rainbow nation...yea right...the only colour really benifiting is black...and there is not even black in the rainbow...nor white for that matter or brown.
I do not consider myself a racist, I'm not against blacks or browns or any colour, I just do not like what is happening to this country and the way people are treated.
OK, that was a whole long speech.
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Thank you angelica, yes Nelson Mandela is a special soul, who chose a difficult incarnation to teach the world many lessons. Even at his age he is still working for world peace! Thank you for your comments, they are truly appreciated! ~Dini~
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A wonderful Acrostic on a country that has seen many changes, it's wonderful to see, I remember reading about Nelson Mandella and how he was wrongly accused. He is a wonderful man who is now doing much to help his Country. Well written.
Good luck in our Contest.
Hugs Joan
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Thanks yashafan Thanks for the comment! I am glad you liked it!
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yes, perseptions are exactly that, changable, and lessons can be learnt from the changes that our country has gone through! To many the greatest Hero of my country Nelson Mandela was branded a vilian! And he has gone on the teach the world compassion and forgiveness!
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Thank you down without you.... Thanks for the crit I really apreciate!
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This is a good poem, I can really feel with it, so keep up the good work, Good job! -
This is cool, I rememeber writting those for the school newspaper!! ha, i think i like this one better than mine though
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Nice form makes you think of how perceptions change from one minute to the next
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nice, i really love acrostic poems, this was very well done, and really well expressed. wonderful ideas in the poem, great presentation as always in this form and lovely wording v well done
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Thank you Jennifer, I am new to form poetry and I am enjoying the Acrostic
thanks for a stunning contest!
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Thank you Richard, Yes We do have much to celebrate, and I know that this country can only grow from here on. The next generation of leaders have now come through an integrated system, of higher education and golden opertunaties, and we have all been blessed to witness this transformetion! ~Dini~
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A very lovely Acrostic, I see you are from South Africa, It's a very powerful poem that speaks volumes. I really enjoyed reading it. Your country has gone through a lot over the centuries and this Acrostic speaks volumes. Very well written.
Thank you for entering our contest.
Good luck.
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Thank you tanzanite.......my muse.......I wonder....I would have to give that one some thought....
Thanks for the crit my friend, it is truly apreciated! 
~Dini~
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Thank you Moi~ I somehow knew this one would touch you deeply! I have also been in a dufferent space all day, and this write happend while I was feeling all kinds of frustrations building from all sides.
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Lovely stuff - a very powerful acrostic that stunned me in its brevity and power. You are developing more every day and I for one am glad to see this creative spark - I wonder who this muse could be... smile...
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Incredibly Powerful
This is really powerful stuff! Well done my love. You have captured the feelings of a nation that suffered terrible injustices at the hands of the apartheid regime.
Thanks to those young 'villains' of yesteryear, we now have a just society with the most advanced constitution in the world. I am so proud to be a South African and to be living here during these exciting, vibrant and uplifting times! Let us not forget the past, but strive to learn from its mistakes. I appreciate your choice of acrostic. It is very much how I feel today! I have missed you terribly. You are an incredible woman, my love.
~ Moira
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Thanks for the crit Wolf, it is really apreciated!
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Thank You, they actually came through without to much of a problem. I Lived through the struggle in my own country, and have been blessed to see many hero's emerge from those times. Thank you for the comment ~Dini~
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Thanks Molly, I was playing around with some ideas, I am glad you liked this one!
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excelent write
I haven't seen many poems like this! I was able to capture the feeling of the word. Excellent flow, too! -
Well thought out lines you have created in this acrostic poem. These are not easy to figure out, yet you have managed to do a great job.
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wonderful!!! you captured the feeling of this world greatly. awesoem job and make sure to keep it up!!!
peace
Molly
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