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I'm mortal

Sleep, Fairy Child, Sleep…
In this world glamour will never succeed
merciless shred by the frigid razor of triviality,
devoured and forgotten in all your fragility.

Sleep and do not forget to dream;
while I guard your casket below the water’s stream
and I age slowly, miscounting the seasons,
immortal in a decadent body, cruelest of all prisons.  

Sleep in your flourished bed, so innocent,
blending with the petals and the fragrant scent,
while mountains are raised and to the ground razed,
and men roams in the meadow no longer hallowed

Open your eyes slowly and awake, Fairy Queen,
do not be afraid of the old visage you have never seen,
and drink gently the dew from this golden goblet  
whilst past is restored by Memory; Our First Poet.

Remember me, Queen, now decrepit and aged,
your faithful consort from you never departed.
Oh, please. In an instant that seems so brief
we shall not waste words with grief…

The world is now changed in yours again,
Now you can journey freely without pain,
I however must linger behind and vanish;
My duty was completed only for you to relish.

I said my farewell, but she never accepted;
My spirit was, from my remains, captured,
and enclosed in a red jewel; I am Bounded,
by the Fairy Queen I was never abandoned.

Dream now, dream now, Immortal…
Dream  the words that enthrall
Two Souls in a timeless embrace,
charming the world with magic’s resurgence.

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Written October 31st, 2005

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  • lavi sky rogue
    November 15, 2005
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    This is really very nice. I loved the images and the use of language. It gave me a nice feeling, too. Great job!
  • Joao Camilo
    November 14, 2005
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    I mixed the old faery stories, to a moderm world to talk about waiting long for something that will only happens in the future and may take too long to happens and when it happens, despite all the effort, it was worth.
  • Leechy
    November 14, 2005
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    I liked the wording, but I think I missed the general meaning. Is it about childhood fantasy? I was trying to understand, but I couldn't quite get the metaphor. Anyway, I liked the overall form and flow, even if I did miss the point. The beginning and ending served as a sort of frame and opened and closed the poem nicely. Good work.
  • itsjustme
    November 14, 2005
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    Well done, you've got a great piece here, the imagery was simply outstanding. Keep up the excellent work, espically if all your pieces are like this.
  • Joao Camilo
    November 8, 2005
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    Thank you Shadow Dudete
    thank you, Massy

  • ShadowFox
    November 8, 2005
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    Wow... This is beautiful, Oro Dude.

  • Vernal Bloom
    November 7, 2005
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    Aali

    I’m impressed,Jaoa..it was beautiful.I like the Fairy Queen you said.My favorites stanzas is:

    “Sleep in your flourished bed, so innocent,
    blending with the petals and the fragrant scent,
    while mountains are raised and to the ground razed,
    and men roams in the meadow no longer hallowed”
    Thank you,man

    ~Massy~

  • SmudgedInk
    November 2, 2005
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    Beautiful Joao.Another poem that made my heart flutter with happiness.I like this story/poem.It is very pretty and make sme feel light.Good job!^_^
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