He holds me gently and squeezes my button.
Shaloop, my shutter opens for 125th of a second.
My mirror pops up out the way and all of a sudden
My film fills with light, time travels beckon
Nikon is my name, conquering time is my game.
My 85mm. portrait lens is my favorite.
My zoom telephoto and wide-angle lenses tame
Space as well as time; I savour it!
I save scenes better than people can.
I save crime scenes for the police department.
I determine how fast a race horse ran.
Truth resides in my film compartment!
The best telescopes are giant cameras
Collecting the light from distant stars.
Cameras are essential to the manners
Pictures come from space of planets like Mars.
Cameras now don't use just film.
More cameras today are electronic.
Cameras today are small and trim,
Some small enough to go in your pocket!
My man holds me close; I work for him.
He squeezes my button when he says when.
I love my man as I begin
Defying time with each click of my lens.
Ellis
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Written October 22nd, 2005
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A Ranaway winner!
An enjoyable read. I am glad you took the advice and changed the title. This one is very good. I love some of your rhymes.
But Ellis, really
"I decide winners of races ran."
Ran?? Now that is a forced rhyme!!!
"Space as well as time; I savior it" Do you mean "savour"?
I love this line -
Truth resides in my film compartment
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Thank you, Peezzi!
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The imagery is great. Such art. it is wonderful
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neato poem... makes me wanna snap a few pictures myself...
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Interesting anthropomorphism.
I enjoyed the idea of an object as narrator.
Jim S -
Cleverly done... enjoyed this.. I like it when people write about inaminate objects... bringing them to life..
made me smile at the unique imagery here.. well done
~GILL~xxx -
nice write pretty unique , good angle to come from ,as if your a camera , the title drew me in good job done .
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very unique. I agree though that you should omit cameras from your title. let the reader figure it out on his own, as a surprise.
good poem.
~travis
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really unique theme for a poem. and well-written...you did a sensational job in this. my only suggestion would be to delete the (cameras) in your title. it seems to state to your readers that they may be too stupid to pick up the gist of the poem for themselves, an explanation isn't necessary. whoever isn't able to deduce that you're speaking of cameras in the poem, probably can't read, you know? besides, i think just "Time Busters" is a great draw to your reader...
Jo
Edited on Oct 23, 1:56 because 'fingers working faster than brain, or vice-versa...'. -
The repeatition of the word scene in the third stanza the word "when" in the second line of the last stanza threw me off a bit but over all it was good poem. Very cute.
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