The mirror surrounds me, gloomy…
That is how I can see…
That is when you ask me,
what is so troublesome in such scenery ?
Initially, silence was my muted response,
before my eyes haze shadows withered
Standing, beaming, I saw her reflected,
and myself, behind…all inverse…
My hand petted her smooth hair…
My lips dared to frame hers and feeds…
You murmur and the disquieting angst breeds,
who could say reality could cause such impair?
I noticed our voice and mine are the same,
you are the reflex and she was not mine…
Another man, my gestures strives to rhyme
Another lover your lips desired to name…
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Written September 22nd, 2005
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A contest entry
- Shadows......................... by Entwining Beauty.
300 points, ended January 23, 2006, 13 entries
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this is great good luck in the contest
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You really write well and I guess English is not your firt language? I simply love the flow in this and the word choice is brilliant. A great read, all is all.
Although the whole write is good, I specially liked the lines: Standing, beaming, I saw her reflected,
and myself, behind…all inverse…
Beautiful!!!
Love and light,
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I really liked this poem. It was a clever little take on what is an overly done topic. So I bow my head to you on that... also the word usage is quite extrandory and well done. The flow is good but could improve- just a minor suggestion. Countinue to write and pick creative topic. You write very well. Keep it up! M.T.B.
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I did not forgot, I will never
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Good job....Mirror eyes...You forget.I like tis poem .
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ooooooOOOooOOooo I love it.
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