I want to hear as if the words are mine,
for so long, they entangled like a wild vine,
wrapping my tongue with roots deeply incrusted,
while the question unanswered still continued.
It is like lighting, raging in the skies,
during storms, shouting thundering cries;
violently burning thoroughly the flesh;
flashing like the golden hind dash ?
It is like the arrow, piercing the lover’s heart
spitting seeds of red blood on the earth so tart ?
Or it must be like the flight, gaining air,
with the steadfast lightness of the bowman’s flair ?
Should I simply yell a whisper,
leaning closer to her ears to register;
not the letters, faint similes, so cold;
but the spirit, hot, blazing ? Behold!
May the words do not be like iron chains,
weighting her body with distressing pains;
but be like a crown and brighten her presence
to captive her lover with love’s brilliance.
Author notes
Written August 29th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Love by forget my memories.
300 points, ended June 16, 2006, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this is a good poem. i still have like 20 more to read but good luck and nice job.
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this is a pretty good poem..not exactly what im looking for but good..nice write!
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love the rhyming in oarts though some seemed rather strange but oh well it was still a great write so who cares right? lol I loved the piece as a whole very good job.
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Hi! You've got some beautiful imagery and a wonderful command of the language here. This is an amazing poem. You've managed to take some of the old cliches and rework them so that they're new. Bravo! Nice job.
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Interesting choice of words, well-suited for the tone and topic. I very much enjoyed this one.
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Well it is said that the love is the second name of the madness and every body of us are running for this madness too. The love is a wine and it takes us to the world of romance through and through,The words of this write are flying in the sky of the love . The intensity of the concept is very deep and very effective too in terms of communicating the message given in this write. The beauty of the write lies in its melody where love is in the main focus of the write. The flow of the write is very impressive and to the point too. I relly appreciate this work.prabhudyal khattar
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Hi, aaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, love, complex, deverstating,infuriating,frustrating,hair raising, and wonderful but can be very painful,you put it well my friend, hope it will always be wonderful for you, Di
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This was beautiful
it just flowed
i love how you've
described everything,
this piece really touched me,
and i would love to read more from you,
keep up the good work
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You've used many metaphors and images here, and that made the poem quite colourful. The tone is heartfelt, passionate and yet innocent, you've given the poem a very touching charachter. Great write with this, I liked it loads!
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This is amazingly beautiful. I loved all of the images that you created with your word choice. You done an excellent job on creating this piece. Keep up the excellent work.
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i like how you have depicted how it must feel to say you love someone. i love how you've described how it might feel without being sure. the innocence of this piece really touched me! good job!
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nice job on the imagery again and rhyming its a great write good luck
~Nyx -
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the black rose wilts -
How to say I love you !! WOW. this is very deep..lots of very effective and discriptive word use..yet I hope no one wants to tell me they love me any time soon, it's kinda scary!!
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WOW... This is a very beautiful poem!!! You did a great job on this!!! I really love this poem!!! It is so pretty and well written!!!
Beth -
This is very beautiful poetry well expressed emotions flow soft in this the anticipation of choice to deem audiance is very well conveyed in your poetry. nice poetic flow. Enjoyed reading today.
Melonie -
WOW.. This was beautiful it just flowed so smoothly, reading it felt like being on a cloud! Those words though, that u speak of, are very hard words to say...
Anyways.. AMAZING WORK!!!
Melpomene -
Wow, Joao. You really have picked up your site while I've been gone. By the way, very good poetry to boot. You keep penning, and sometime soon I might pick my pen back up to.
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Mastered ? That means I am a Master!!
Thank you, Glam, but it is not true your poem sucks, I found your short poems to have a nice and confortable lightness, very interesting. Thank you. -
SO UN FAIR!!! You mastered AMAZING poetry to two languages!!!My poems in my own natives language suck!!! haha You have more talent then a dog on a skateboard!!!!
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Digamos, que eu estava inspirado
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Oh may! João, suas rimas são impecáveis até mesmo em inglês!
Esse poema é lindo, e tem aquele peculiar padrão de quem está amando
Ah que bom ler um poema na sua página que no lugar de ser triste, fala de um amor sublime. Adorei! -
Love.
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