The winter arrived mounted in his whistling mares,
along with his alluring daughter that covered the field
with her soft and pale touch. The cold wind carried his voice:
“Leave now, birds, flowers and pets. The Winter is coming,
with his daughter. Here we can already feel his freezing stare
while her long silvery hair covers all the meadows!”
Everything sprinted, daunted by the Winter warning.
All but one, a single flower remained. Adamant.
The Winter daughter’s saw her and softly warned:
“Run, run, little flower. Your petals are going to break,
you spirit to freeze. Your beauty to be lost and never to return”
The flower lifted her petals and intrepid she answered.
“I will not leave. Not now or not tomorrow.”
“Flower, flower. It is your time. Time to go and be memory,
and who know, to be dreamed. This age is now gone,
and it is time for a new one. New flowers are going to breed,
new beauty for it is what we need: change.”
The flower shivered and her voice almost fainted.
“Never. And Ever! I will here remain. Does not matter what new age,
what new vision and what new liege. I will never leave!”
The daughter of the Winter was saddened because that was
a very appealing flower. She knew her father would crush her
with his weight. She then carefully covered the flower and left,
certain that would be the last time she would be seen…
Truly, The Winter is ravaging. But he also had to depart.
After him followed his daughter, blessed by the new sunshine.
In her path she heard a sound, of wonder and contentment,
curious she delayed her journey and the sound she tracked;
to found a group of men scattered around a flower:
lively and beautiful, the flower remained and then pronounced:
“Beauty lasts more than seasons, Daughter of the Winter,
when graciously captured with mastery by the finest art.”
And the Daughter of the Winter left, and in many other instances,
with that flower she made acquaintance…perpetually…
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Written August 15th, 2005
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Your poem has been removed from our contest because the final judging is taking place. Thank you for entering
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I understand what you say; and not saying it could not be that way but I think the reason why I probally did not in such way when I wrote was because: For once I already give hints of his coming before this part but mostly because that would be giving to the winter a importance in the poem while the only aspect that was important is "his daughter" and I prefered to keep him at distance.
Also the winter is already a metaphor, I am afraid if we put much more metaphors inside it would make hard for the reader to follow the true philosophical meaning of the poem (Which is how art can survive and be admired no matter the period it was produced or if the "ism" of her time is already gone).
I hope you do not mind to have a poem telling a story and I am glad you saw no problem with the language use.
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You use a lot of figurative language, but you simply tell this story instead of showing it to me:
The Winter is coming,
with his daughter. Here we can already feel his freezing stare... how could you show that winter is coming without actually saying so? How can you show the "freezing stare" instead of just telling it? For example:
Bears grow fat and sleepy,
squirrel homes are stocked with acorns,
north wind brings shivers...
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Beautiful Joao. This is well written and very metaphorical. Made me think
Gread job 
Thanks for entering and good luck
Kat
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Life is a circle and never ended without our wish. It is very said with your verses - story. Like the artist - painter - you made it for life:
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“Beauty lasts more than seasons, Daughter of the Winter,
when graciously captured with mastery by the finest art.”
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This time - your art. 
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The daughter of the Winter was saddened because that was
a very appealing flower. She knew her father would crush her
with his weight. She then carefully covered the flower and left,
certain that would be the last time she would be seen…
Oh you! the winter - the metaphor the beautiful beautiful metaphor! The daughter of the winter! Such cold beauty exists here- such lovely, lovely, cold beauty here.
And winter answers- it always does- it answers because it knows the beauty returns- it always returns- the spring with its budding promise - its glorious, glorious budding promise and you- you tell us this poet- you paint it- you capture it with simplicity of metaphor, complex simplicity- so very hard to capture but you've done it. You are a poet and your words are your voice, your paint brush and canvas - your accomplishment- your promise. The beauty returns and you poet, you - you paint it and show it. Bravo! Beautiful. -
Good job
amazing niec flow and tone also the subject.
this is a very excellent write words well chosen wit a wonderful expressions
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Astonishing language. So complete in tone and manner, great imagery and desciptive themes. Very impressive. -
what a lovely poem.the words seemed to flow into eachother. A great write. I truly enjoyed it. thanks for sharing.
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great
hey great write very beautiful you are a great writer well done
And the Daughter of the Winter left, and in many other instances,
with that flower she made acquaintance…perpetually…
those last 2 lines are great love them well done
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BEAUTIFUL!!! That blew me away! It celebrated the amazing everlasting beauty present in courage, to withstand the hard times!!!! AMAZING WORK!!!!
Keep it up!
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I loved the final stanza. That sealed the deal for me. Great work of poetry
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good point, since I could not find the paper where i wrote the original, I will never know what I really said, So I will just consider myself dumb
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"I will never left?" Not sure if thatis what you meant here? A nice tale of the power of the 'flower' spirit. Liked this.
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Its true that I prefer reading short poems (maybe I'm lazy or have a short concentration span) but this was beautiful. You made great use of personification and possibly inspired me to give it a try too. Good write, reads like a story.
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this beatiful to say the least, it very thought provoking and well written, and just filled much emotion very nice work!
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Nice job! Very beautiful piece you have here. I much faith in you, I admire how you can write something like this
Keep it up
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This is mesmerizing! This is the type of poetry I am not capable of and I have great admiration for those who can do it and do it beautifully as you have done here. Good job.
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how pretty!! Its lovely!
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