. I think about you often
Even though I try not to
You are always on my mind
I just can't get over you
And it makes me feel lost
It makes me feel like I'm sinkin'
'Cause I've kept you in my heart
And it makes me keep thinkin'
I don't wanna miss you anymore!!
I don't wanna hurt all the time
I don't wanna be all yours
when you're not all mine
'Cause I feel so lonely
and cold to the core
I don't want to miss you
anymore
I asked you not to call me
I said please don't for awhile
It's been weeks since we last spoke
But you're still my toughest trial
I couldn't stand to hear
you sound as happy as you seem
Like you don't miss me one bit
While I keep dyin' to scream
I don't wanna miss you anymore!!
I don't wanna hurt all the time
I don't wanna be all yours
when you're not all mine
'Cause I feel so lonely
and cold to the core
I don't want to miss you
anymore
Of course I want you to be happy
But I wanna be happy, too
I've always been totally independent
So why does it feel like I need you?
And why wasn't I enough for you
How come you don't miss me this way
Like when I lie and say I'm doin' fine
But inside I really ache to say....
I don't wanna miss you anymore!!
I don't wanna hurt all the time
I don't wanna be all yours
when you're not all mine
'Cause I feel so lonely
and cold to the core
I don't wanna miss you
anymore
.....No, I don't wanna miss you!!!.......... anymore....
Author notes
These are lyrics, but I didn't note Verse One, Verse Two, Bridge One, etc. because I thought it would be distracting from what I'm saying. Hopefully someday I'll be able to put it to music. But for now that's what there is. I know it's pretty rough, but that's where it is right now. Please only leave thoughtful, sincere comments or none at all. Thanks for reading!
Written April 20th, 2005
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- **Blue Eyes and Secret Smiles by Ohriginality.
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Excellent write but you might want to rethink the font color - it's very difficult to focus. You don't want to take attention away from so beautiful a piece.
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WOO HOO! That's how I wanna feel, that's what I wanna write like. Reading poetry like yours inspires me. Thank you!
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WOW
You don't know how much this poem means to me!!! It describes my sadness completely, with your premission I would like to place this under my authors info as my favourite poem!! With your name of course!! Please send my a message if you approve!
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This was awesome..I would like totally buy this cd, if it was one..Haha, cause I relate to this song and I must say, You captured the way I feel so good, I just ah...it was just an awesome write and I loved it so so much! Great Song...i want to actually hear it!
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good
Very well understood, goes well with
my poems too. will you read them?
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good
Very well understood, goes well with
my poems too. will you read them?
see what you think? " Forget" and " Dont". -
These are great lyrics! I know exactly how this feels, too. The chorus is wonderful!! BRAVO! I agree with Kim, you could set this to almost any type of music: rock, pop, country, rhythm and blues...a very universal write. Great job! Sheryl
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I thought you did a great job on this too. I don't think it was necessary for you to note the bridge or chorus on a piece written like this. They were pretty obvious and your meter / flow came across strong as lyrics.
I think I like the chorus most of all of the "stanzas" in this piece. The only small change I'd consider is in the first verse, to change the "you are" to "you're". Throughout the rest of your piece, you write exactly how you'd annunciate each word. I can't picture you saying 'you are' if you're really not thinking about it. The reflexive word would be "you're". Throughout the rest of the piece you combine your words with contractions - so that one place just nagged at me a bit.
Overall, I think you did a tremendous job with these lyrics. Though I have no idea as to what kind of music you would put this too, they seem versatile enough to blend in well with most kinds of music.
Nicely done indeed
Kim -
Great job! I write lyrics, too. I can definitely hear this to music. I can really understand the emotions behind this. The truly great lyrics are true and heartfelt, and this one is both. Keep up the good work! If it's OK, I would like to add you to my faves!
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nice write
a great song...very touching. gonna be a hit one day i bet. i love the feeling of this cuz i know EVERYONE has felt like this before and if they say they haven't they're lying!!! LOL
XOXO
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good job writing this poem!! It was really well written and thought out. I can relate to this poem in many ways and the strong feeling and emotion mentioned was beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this piece. Keep writing!!
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Wow! This is how i feel about someone at the momment! Great write, great flow too!
Well odne! X
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is this a song? nicely done tho, hope you keep it up, other people seemd to enjoy it too. so it must be good. well thanks for letting me have the chance to read your work, nice very nice.
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Well I used to write alot of songs and now I mostly just write poetry when I can be bothered to, anyway I think you did an excellent job and I think these lyrics would be great in a song, well done
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This relates to me in more ways then one, greatly written very welldone.
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Distinguishable
I really enjoyed reading it.
"I don't wanna be all yours
when you're not all mine". makes a lot of sense! especially when feeling lonely.Great poem
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that's a very, very nice write. I can picture some music going along with it. It seems to flow nicely. It's universal enough that everyone...well most everyone can relate to it in some form or another. The chorus, is very good. And this seems like it could be a softer song or it could sound pretty good as a little more amped up, rougher type song. If you get what I'm saying. But I bet it would sound wonderful any which way you'd like to take it. This is a very very nice write. do you play guitar or some sort of instrument?
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