What do our actions do?
Accept the consequences....
What do we do when the dice rolls?
Admit we can't fly forever....
Can you live without me?
I'd want you to be at peace....
Will you move on with another man?
Widow's shawl can't hide your hair....
Could you love again if I died?
I'd be smiling down on you....
Would you laugh again?
Lovingly I'd want you to....
To find new lover, would you let him sleep in our bed?
He could never measure up to our love....
Does death til we part mean you can love him?
Not like I do to take your hand in marriage....
What about our children?
Nobody knows my troubles but God....
Could they live without a father?
Heavenly Father calls us home no matter what....
What does it mean caring for someone else's life?
In sickness and in health....
Do we owe a debt to love?
Til death we shall not part....
If I died and my heart could save another?
It's just so hard to live without you.
What would you do?
Pray to God you never have to make that decision.
Author notes
wow... just a lot of thought on death.... studying art from early 20th century and it's leaving me lots of fun gloom
add in the movie 21grams.... messed up movie with a goodly amount of questions to ask of our souls and of family, thanks for reading
live it up while we're still breathing... tell me how i did, it's not my usual style
gooday
Written March 11th, 2005
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A contest entry
- Death contest by Leila.
400 points, ended October 20, 2005, 52 entries
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You'd almost think you'd been married the way you express yourself in this one.
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well done!!
i liked this alot,it really is a great reflection of what ifs,and when you get to the bare bones of life,and your hanging on by a thread,what would you do? i like your style,keep it up,this one is a winner in my book.i like gloomy
nbf/janis
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I love itDaddy./ It is really dark . Like the stuff that I have been writing lately. I love it. It is so morbid. I love writing about death.
Cryatal (Trikra) -
it was pretty cool, kinda sad, but enjoyable, keep writing ~Rush
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This is really romantic...and for a man to write something so deep and yet dark, its amazing.(I'm not saying men don't have talent.. i'm saying that the majority of men I know....they don't write their feelings.
The flow kept me going and in the end, you ended it with such a great question.. It left me thinking.. And well thats a good thing with most peices of writings.. even in novels.. but neways GREAT job..
Samantha -
very moving peace, quite dark. I like you imagery in this poem, it creates a very dark atmosphere. Good ork. Keep on writing!!
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It was really moving and romantic in a way, but you ruined it at the end with Peace out, otherwise you did an amazing job with structure, rhyme, and flow. Keep up the goodwork--Ann
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blinks...reads twice This is very unlike your your write up 'til this time..but I do like the change. You have a strong point, and express it well in this piece. Hopefully none of us have to make that choice in years to come.
much
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Why does this poem remind me of an Aerosmith song...
There goes my old girlfriend
There's another diamond ring
And a all those late night promises
I guess they don't mean a thing
So baby, what's the story
Did you find another man
Is it easy to sleep in the bed that we made
When you don't look back I guess
The feelings start to fade away
I used to feel your fire
But now it's cold inside
And you're back on the street
Like you didn't miss a beat, yeah
hehe sorry had to post the lyrics... awesome song though and a good poem dad
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