I am a bitch of a critiquer, honestly I can tare poems apart. That is exactly what I'm going to do on here, tare them apart so you can rework them and make them better! Now just so you know I'm redoing all my work, so if I point out something you need to fix on your poem, and you see it on my old poems give me some time to go over them and fix them. I've been in a creative writing class for a quarter now so I think by reworking my old poems I can make them so much better. I'm also adding the poems I did in class. Hopefully I can get people commenting on my work again. If you comment, I'll return the favor! =]
Now a bit about me, I am only 15 but I've experienced so much. I've been through so much pain, heartache, abuse, etc. Writing helps me get through things. I'm very mature for my age, I've seen a lot, and I know way more then I should for my age. I guess I'm really fucked up in my mind, I think a lot differently then most people. But hey as long as my writings good... I just wrote something down the other day,
God, why did you give me such a traitorous life?
Such incapable parents?
What did I ever do to deserve this?
I get it, I’m my own character,
writing my own story
in my own book.
Where’s my happy ending?
Oh yeah, I didn’t write a happy ending,
in the end she gives up.
She kills herself
she goes to the bathroom
takes the silver blade
runs it down her veins
until she sees her life fade.
I'm currently writing a book about a girl named Jude. I put Jude through some terrible things that happend to me in my own life, but the ending is more dramatic. She kills herself, well I was very depressed that night and I was wondering if maybe I'd end up the same... But I think I'm stronger then that.
Now a bit about me, I am only 15 but I've experienced so much. I've been through so much pain, heartache, abuse, etc. Writing helps me get through things. I'm very mature for my age, I've seen a lot, and I know way more then I should for my age. I guess I'm really fucked up in my mind, I think a lot differently then most people. But hey as long as my writings good... I just wrote something down the other day,
God, why did you give me such a traitorous life?
Such incapable parents?
What did I ever do to deserve this?
I get it, I’m my own character,
writing my own story
in my own book.
Where’s my happy ending?
Oh yeah, I didn’t write a happy ending,
in the end she gives up.
She kills herself
she goes to the bathroom
takes the silver blade
runs it down her veins
until she sees her life fade.
I'm currently writing a book about a girl named Jude. I put Jude through some terrible things that happend to me in my own life, but the ending is more dramatic. She kills herself, well I was very depressed that night and I was wondering if maybe I'd end up the same... But I think I'm stronger then that.
- Last seen right now. Member since July 16, 2008.
- I'm a diamond love poet for 206 comments.
- I am a 15 year old girl from Wisconsin (United States)
- When I'm not writing, I'm a highschool sophomore student .
- I am in the groups A Glitter Scarred Mascara Teared Group, Alone and Broken, Comments for All, Depression support group, Do you want your poem read, Drug wrecks and candy pills, DuctTaped Hearts n BarbedWire Feelings, PinUp Doll Disasters, The freedom to promote your poems and, Titles Are Us, To Write Love On Her Arms, xx Perfection Pills xx Puppet Pawns xx
- I have 206 comments, 2 contests, 50 poems, 6 stories
My Poetry
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1 lines, November 8
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no joy to be found where it use to have been,
books are shelved, gathering dust,14 lines, September 26 -
And he’s already hurt me as much as he can
You are a whole new field of broken glass -
Feel the warmth eating you alive
Feel it take you into its caring grasps and evaporate your soul
My Stories
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“I’m running away you know… And I’m not coming back, I promise you that,” Mavvy whispered as she stared at her feet. Next to her on the couch sate two bags, and a baby seat. A silent baby slept beneath the thin pile of covers861 lines, January 3. In 600-2000 words
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543 lines, January 3. In <600 words, Death, Depression, Drama, Love, Sad, Teen, Unfinished, Young adult
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“When people go crazy… Where do they go crazy?" Maybe it’s so beautiful that it captures in people and makes them one of its own.536 lines, January 2. In <600 words
Guest Book
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lowercase prelude on December 25, 2008Hope you had a Merry Christmas and just a great day overall
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lowercase prelude on December 3, 2008Thank you for adding me to your favorites. I appreciate that. I added you to mine.
Have a great day
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Aesthete on November 30, 2008I'm in no state to read your work in justice, but i intend to as soon as i'm able.. probably tomorrow ha. but thanks for adding.
have you ever seen the south park about gingers?? haha it's awesome
im sure you're the coolest/hottest of them all :] :] -
Maxboy : Thank You on November 26, 2008I wanted to stop by and say thank you for adding me as a favorite, I have just added you to mine. I am very happy to see you have such a compassion for humanity, pretty awesome.
