An author has to put themselves in life's most heartbreaking and painful situations to write a book worth reading. -Danielle Larson
I am a bitch of a critiquer, honestly I can tare poems apart. That is exactly what I'm going to do on here, tare them apart so you can rework them and make them better! Now just so you know I'm redoing all my work, so if I point out something you need to fix on your poem, and you see it on my old poems give me some time to go over them and fix them. I've been in a creative writing class for a quarter now so I think by reworking my old poems I can make them so much better. I'm also adding the poems I did in class. Hopefully I can get people commenting on my work again. If you comment, I'll return the favor! =]
Now a bit about me, I am only 15 but I've experienced so much. I've been through so much pain, heartache, abuse, etc. Writing helps me get through things. I'm very mature for my age, I've seen a lot, and I know way more then I should for my age. I guess I'm really fucked up in my mind, I think a lot differently then most people. But hey as long as my writings good... I have to say I can't stand people who compare their lives with you, everyone has hard lives at some point. You don't know what someones been through, so don't push them, they may have seen worse then you have. Also it's not what happens to you, it's how you deal with what happens.
I just wrote something down the other day,
God, why did you give me such a traitorous life?
Such incapable parents?
What did I ever do to deserve this?
I get it, I’m my own character,
writing my own story
in my own book.
Where’s my happy ending?
Oh yeah, I didn’t write a happy ending,
in the end she gives up.
She kills herself
she goes to the bathroom
takes the silver blade
runs it down her veins
until she sees her life fade.
I'm currently writing a book about a girl named Jude. I put Jude through some terrible things that happend to me in my own life, but the ending is more dramatic. She kills herself, well I was very depressed that night and I was wondering if maybe I'd end up the same... But I think I'm stronger then that.
I am a bitch of a critiquer, honestly I can tare poems apart. That is exactly what I'm going to do on here, tare them apart so you can rework them and make them better! Now just so you know I'm redoing all my work, so if I point out something you need to fix on your poem, and you see it on my old poems give me some time to go over them and fix them. I've been in a creative writing class for a quarter now so I think by reworking my old poems I can make them so much better. I'm also adding the poems I did in class. Hopefully I can get people commenting on my work again. If you comment, I'll return the favor! =]
Now a bit about me, I am only 15 but I've experienced so much. I've been through so much pain, heartache, abuse, etc. Writing helps me get through things. I'm very mature for my age, I've seen a lot, and I know way more then I should for my age. I guess I'm really fucked up in my mind, I think a lot differently then most people. But hey as long as my writings good... I have to say I can't stand people who compare their lives with you, everyone has hard lives at some point. You don't know what someones been through, so don't push them, they may have seen worse then you have. Also it's not what happens to you, it's how you deal with what happens.
I just wrote something down the other day,
God, why did you give me such a traitorous life?
Such incapable parents?
What did I ever do to deserve this?
I get it, I’m my own character,
writing my own story
in my own book.
Where’s my happy ending?
Oh yeah, I didn’t write a happy ending,
in the end she gives up.
She kills herself
she goes to the bathroom
takes the silver blade
runs it down her veins
until she sees her life fade.
I'm currently writing a book about a girl named Jude. I put Jude through some terrible things that happend to me in my own life, but the ending is more dramatic. She kills herself, well I was very depressed that night and I was wondering if maybe I'd end up the same... But I think I'm stronger then that.
- Last seen 10 hours ago. Member since July 16, 2008.
- I'm a jade dragon poet for 229 comments.
- I am a 15 year old girl from Wisconsin (United States)
- When I'm not writing, I'm a highschool sophomore student .
- I am in the groups A Glitter Scarred Mascara Teared Group, Alone and Broken, Comments for All, Depression support group, Do you want your poem read, Drug wrecks and candy pills, DuctTaped Hearts n BarbedWire Feelings, PinUp Doll Disasters, The freedom to promote your poems and, Titles Are Us, To Write Love On Her Arms, xx Perfection Pills xx Puppet Pawns xx
- I have 229 comments, 2 contests, 50 poems, 12 stories, 3 journals
My Poetry
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1 lines, 3 comments, November 8
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no joy to be found where it use to have been,
books are shelved, gathering dust,14 lines, 3 comments, September 26 -
And he’s already hurt me as much as he can
You are a whole new field of broken glass -
Feel the warmth eating you alive
Feel it take you into its caring grasps and evaporate your soul
My Stories
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1907 lines, November 20. In 600-2000 words, Dark, Fantasy, Fiction, Horror, Strange, Unfinished, Young adult
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My journal entries
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I just deleted an entry. "Red Flags are Breaking my Heart" it was about how I thought maybe my feelings for George were back. Also that my feelings for him were majorily strong. Today I relized how wrong I was. Logan finally messaged me, and now because he found out Maxwell and I are talking again he believes I'm pla
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You think your life is complicated? Well that guy I was just talking about it’s gotten complicated. Before I get into complicated tales of he’s, and him’s, let me give the people in these journals names. The guy that I was speaking about in my last journal entry that I missed will be named Maxwell. My ex boyfriend th
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How can I sit here, pondering why I continue to get hurt. My heart continues to get shattered by untrustworthy guys. How guys can come to me, then simply walk away with a new tramp on their arm. What do they have that I don't? 1 Latley since I have been thinking about this, I just wrote a diary entry that said "November 11, In Depression, Love, My life, Pain, Personal, Thoughts. 400 words. → Make first comment?
Guest Book
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lowercase prelude on December 25, 2008Hope you had a Merry Christmas and just a great day overall
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lowercase prelude on December 3, 2008Thank you for adding me to your favorites. I appreciate that. I added you to mine.
Have a great day
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Aesthete on November 30, 2008I'm in no state to read your work in justice, but i intend to as soon as i'm able.. probably tomorrow ha. but thanks for adding.
have you ever seen the south park about gingers?? haha it's awesome
im sure you're the coolest/hottest of them all :] :] -
Maxboy : Thank You on November 26, 2008I wanted to stop by and say thank you for adding me as a favorite, I have just added you to mine. I am very happy to see you have such a compassion for humanity, pretty awesome.
